One day a little girl called Sarah decided to go skiing, which she loved. Her favourite place to ski was Ben Nevis Mountain in Scotland. When she arrived she ran all the way to the lift to take her to the top of the supreme, spectacular mountain. As she was going down the amazing mountain she saw a humungous vulture. Sarah, scared, ran to the oak tree, she tried to speed up but it was too late. The vulture grabbed Sarah. The vulture was lonely, he asked Sarah to be friends and to share his breakfast of cereal with him.
Jack
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Hello Jack. This is a really great story! Your descriptive words are very strong, and you have thought very hard about your punctuation – it really helps your writing to flow clearly. Well done, I love it!
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